A Different Helm's Deep by Shadowfax500
Disclaimer: I do not own anything from Tolkien’s universe, or the idea from the movie.
Authors note: I know this will be awful, so please don’t flame me!
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Arwen sat staring out of the window towards the East. Her hair was gently brushed back by the breeze, and a single tear fell down her cheek. It was a grey, overcast day, a reflection of what she felt. She missed Aragorn so much. Everything hurt inside her, it hurt to breathe or eat, and sleep would never come to her. Amongst the hurt, there was a flicker of anger. Not against him, she knew he had to go, but that she could not do anything to help him. Arwen longed to do more than just sit around in Imladris. She wanted to go to war. Then, if he died, she could be there with him, and let herself follow him. Arwen also hated not to be doing anything in the fight against Sauron.
While Arwen was sitting by the window, her father had been at a council meeting with Haldir and some other important Galadhrim and Rivendell warriors. They had decided to go to Helm’s deep with an army of 900 to help against the Uruk- Hai army of Sauron. Finally, the council had finished.
Elrond walked down the hallway towards Arwen’s room. Quietly pushing open the door, he went and sat down beside her.
“Why do you weep, my Evenstar?”
“You know why, Ada.”
Elrond sighed. “Will you not go to the Havens?”
A thought suddenly occured to Arwen. She could be with Aragorn, after all! She swiftly turned to face her father. “I will. But I must leave now. Everywhere I look reminds me of him, and I cannot bear to stay here a moment longer.”
Elrond was amazed! What had changed her mind so quickly? “Will you be okay alone?” he asked.
“Yes. I can use a sword well, you know that.”
In an hour, Arwen was ready to ride. She had packed most of her belongings to fool her father.
In the stables, her favourite grey mare had already been saddled and was awaiting her. Swiftly, she mounted and galloped out of the gate.
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Please review! It will get more interesting in future chapters, so please bear with me!
65 Comments
nice shadowfax i suppose it will get more interesting in futre chapters i will keep reading if you write more please do i wud luv to find out what happens if arwen goes to war but the discription of the day was strange you maybe could work on that why don’t email round people and tell tem it’s not so bad cos it aint keep at it
Hey dude i thought youre story was really good!! Please please PLEASE write more chapters!!
Good Luck!
So far the two chapters have been very good. I like the “what if” line of story telling and you are doing a great job with it. So?? What happens now?!?! Can’t wait to read more.
Very Very Very Very Brilliant
yes its ok. people probably dont review because it is short and there’s not much goin on. or, maybe they’re just not interested!! and maybe they are not members, so they cant review, but that doesnt mean they dont like it. keep writing.
Yesss! You updated it-the chapter was great!
Hi read your fic liked/disliked it bye…. well now you know im a joker lol
i love it! i think that is one of the most unusual stories i have ever read on Arwen’s account. i found it very amusing.
Me again, the third chapter is good. I like that you take your time with the characters, even though we know them (some of them) like family. It’s nice to see you take Arwen and put her in a situation like this. It will be interesting to see her in battle. Yes she can face five Nazgul, but how about a thousand rampaging orcs?! Keep up the good work, and I’m looking forward to chapter 4.
Well, congratulations on such a good work! I’m really curious about your story.
First, I want to know more about Aragorn’s cousin! Didn’t know he had one!! ;p
Next, i hope the story is also a little dramatic. I mean, Arwen *could* get hurt at Helm’s Deep and be saved by Estel (hint, hint).
Anyway, I liked the story this far and I’m sure I’ll like it further on!
Um, I’m not really good at this…well, I LOVED your story, it’s a lot like some of the ones I make up:D Hope to see more soon!
This is great! I really like it, you remind me of me somehow! I never liked the idea of Aragorn being without help of his kinsman at Helm’s deep, and I never liked the idea of Arwen fading at home either! This is really great! Please, continue as soon as possible.
Oh yeah, is the little cousin of Estel your creation? ’cause I cant remember that he had an uncle or aunt..
very good plot. good subject to write on. could be considered au. please add more chapters soon.
that is a cool beginning to a fanfic! i love the story so far and hope you post the next chapter soon.
hi reviewing again can hardly read it like it though it’s probably just my background
Another well written chapter! I didn’t find it boring, instead I found it was nice to see the character development. It makes for a better story, it gives it depth. That’s why the Lord of the Rings books and movies do well, the characters are 3 dimensional. When that happens then you feel for them like a friend. That’s what I feel when I’ve been reading your story, reading what happens to friends. It’s very good!! Keep up the great work mellon nin!!!!
This is getting really interesting! The idea of taking the Dunedain through Rivendell, and Arwen is with them. is GREAT!! How is she gowing to be unnoticed by her father? Hurry up with the update!
Once again, congratulations! This wasn’t boring, honestly! It was very interesting.
I hope you will post the next chapter soon!!
Keep up a good work!! ;p
i wish you would write more.
I’m curious are you a famous author?I mean your good enough to be.So I really hope you write more I check your story everyday to see if you added anymore.Well anyway I really enjoy your story and hope you write more soon.
Tiniwiel13
It’s possible you have a decent story idea, though PJ rejected it for the movie. Your writing, however, is very choppy and mundane, and the characters are flat and one-dimensional; their conversations don’t ring true.
Just compare your writing to Tolkien, F. Scott Fitzgerald, David Weber, Elizabeth George, Tom Clancy, and you’ll see what I mean.
There are any number of books on writing you can get from the library, as well as online courses on writing.
Your spelling and grammar are fine. You need to work, however, at adding life and variety to your story.
Best of luck.
Wonderful! Simply wonderful! I like the way this is heading; I’m really looking foward to see Aragorn’s face, when (and IF) he recognizes Arwen. Is she going to be recognized by anyone? Hurry it up, I want to know if Legolas’ keen elvish eyes can see through Arwen’s disguise!
Anyway, keep it up!
WOW!!I hope you write more soon.I love your story.I don’t see how you could think it was bad.Please write more soon.
Tiniwiel13
very good chapter. please add another chapter soon.
awesome story…. I saw something similar on fanfiction.net did you write that??
PleasePleasePleasePleasePLEASE write more!!!
I loved it!
your stories are so great!! please, give us more!!!! you just put the right spirit in it!
After reading the first chapter…I want MORE!
Most wonderful and fantastic!
So far, I have been enchanted and dazzled by your style of storytelling! Great! Keep it up!
Quite interseting, for what the author says is boring…I think it helped the story in a good way!
Please write more! Pleeeeeeeeassssssssssse!
I love it! Please upate soon. Im really glad you got over your writers block.
Awesome story! Please update soon (even though you just did!) Great work!
This is really interesting and shows another side of Arwen. You might want to mention how much she has fought before and if she has ever killed anything besides the Ringwraiths in the river. Please post more chapters!
Ok, Ok! I’ll review your wonderful story. I think it’s great (MUCH better than I could EVER do! LOL!). Just PLEASE get Arwen to Helms Deep SOON!
I like your story, so I won’t flame it. hehe and not give you the pleasure of reading, laughing and ignoring it. It is reaklly great sotry, so add some more quickly
I like your story, so I won’t flame it. hehe and not give you the pleasure of reading, laughing and ignoring it. It is reaklly great sotry, so add some more quickly
AHHHHH!!!!I do hate cliffies like that.PLEASE write more soon!!!!!!!!(bows down to ground begging)
Great chapter, I’m really curious about how will the story end! Keep up a good work, and post the next chapter soon.
Moooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeee!
Thanx,
Lady Elfsheen
WOW!!PLEASE WRITE MORE SOON!!!PLKEASE MAKE IT SOON
EEEEEEEEEEEEEK! UPDATE!!!!! Don’t let anyone be hurt, pleeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaase! *grovels*
forget flaming, i think it’s a really cool story. It’s a weird coincidence though-i thought about a similar idea for a fanfic. Don’t worry though, i’m not gonna write anything. My only idea is maybe you could make the chapters a little longer? because i think it’s a great story, so please keep writing!
Ooh, great story! The plotline is really interesting! I wonder what’ll happen when Elrond reaches Helm’s Deep–if he does–and if he’ll bring Anduril. Anyway, please write more!
Awesome idea; love this story. Please don’t kill her, and no, I don’t like cliffhangers.
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I love it! It shows Arwen as a useful person, not just a pretty face.
Fabulous, dahling….
Absolutely stunning! I like Haldir’s reaction. Keep it up and update soon!!
you sure like cliffhangers, don’t you. very good writing and please add another chapter soon. on another note, there is a virus going around on the internet that uses email. if you recieve a email from anyone labled “it takes guts to say jesus” or something similar delete it straight away. dont open it. it will erase your whole hardrive if you do.
can you send this warning along to everyone you know. thanks.
Good start – I like your language. However, maybe you write from Arwen’s point of view – it’s more realistic when you talk of her feelings this way, and don’t say her favourite horse – just say her mare.It doesn’t seem very elvish somehow. here’s an example for the start from Arwen’s p.o.v : Grey clouds. I feel grey, empty. Empty and helpless. Sitting by the fireside.What have I done to make my race proud? He is fighting and in danger constantly. He is doing something to stop the destruction of this world. While I do nothing. I am a princess – nothing more. Soft rustle. Ada’s here.I know his soft footfall. How will I convince him? Maybe I shouldn’t.He wouldn’t approve.
Good luck with the rest of your story – I’m glad you’re making Arwen more gutsy and active – it kills one to know that the elvish women like Arwen stay and sit prettily rather than doing something – annoying also that Elrond doesn’t fight ! Well done so far, Kat
Ok, it doesn’t take long to review, but it takes a while to bring the fanfiction page back up. Great job, don’t keep me in suspense. Long chapters are good…..
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Nice chapter. I hope Arwen makes it to Helm’s Deep to see Aragorn. Can’t wait for the next chapter. Great work!
HI!!! Ok, I read the whole thing and I think it’s pretty good. I want to find out what happens next though so hurry up and write some more!!! LOL
-Farwen
That was rreally cool. The fact that Arwen didn’t do a whole lot besides emotional support was kind of annoying in the books and movie. So it’s a nice change from the ordinary.
OK it’s good now put up the new chaps and when you finish it i’l review
OK it’s good now put up the new chaps and when you finish it i’l do a full review of the hole story
It is quite nice, but I wish that there were more chapters and that you could update faster. This story is quite original. 🙂
You needn’t worry at all about it being bad. I find it quite interesting, and would very much like to hear more. Leaving off in an exciting place as you have done is not very kind to your readers, though. My friends berate me for it all the time. Really, it’s quite an interesting twist! Do continue!
That is so awesome! Thank you so much for writing this story! Oh, did you know they actually were going to have Arwen there in the two towers, then cut it out? If you didn’t, then I guess that’s news, but I always wondered what would happen if she did, so thanks!
A good well written story you got here… You got two of my most favorite group ( elves & Dunedain ) march as one into Helms Deep.. Would love to see how the story envelops from here.. I just hope you’d leave a handful of Dunedain & elves surviving the War at Helms Deep in the end… Good job!
um… update? that would be a good idea!
Hello there.
This may come late, but I just wanted to tell you I read the story so far. It’s quite good, but some chapters do seem to drag a bit, and I can’t help but get the feeling it’s somewhat unrealistic.
Elandor.
I like the premise of your story, and I don’t mind the short chapters. I’m not good at constructive criticism, sorry, but it might help the flow of the story if you put the Elvish translations nearer to where they’re speaking Elvish. Just a thought. Otherwise, I hope to see another chapter soon.
whatever you do, don’t stop this story! 😉 how could you think that anyone could flame you?!?! I think it’s awesome. I love Estel’s little cousin! She’s a great character; you’d best not kill her! Or else! hehehe. just joking. 😛
HEY U GOTTA UPDATE THIS!!! It is such a cool read!!! Please, (falls on knees and begs) UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!! I have to hear what happens next!!!!!!!!!!!!