Arien & Tilion by Lady~Eowyn
Arien
The golden sun arising
Yellow rays of light
Peeking out from
The endless horizon
Shining down upon the
Children of the Valar
The blazing radianace of Arien
Brings a rekindled hope
And her everlasting smile
Fills our hearts with joy
Arien the sun-maiden
She who guides Anar
Safely across the clouded sky
Her eternal fires glow
Together with the last fruit of
Laurelin, the Tree of Gold
Tilion
The silver moon sets
Among the netted stars
Glowing upon the
Still waters of Awakening
The silver bowsman
A hunter with Oromë
Fends of the darkness
of Morgoth
Tilion, steersman of the Moon
The wayward guide of Isil
He shines forth with serenity
That touches the sky
With the last flower of
Telperion, the Silver Tree
5 Comments
Yes, it is very well written. Perhaps one of the best ones I read in weeks. Anyway, back to my point, I like it very much, people should write more like you.
Mmm… very pretty. 🙂 If I might make a suggestion for you: try for more meter in your poetry. Even with free verse, a rhythm is important, b/c it gives continuity. Read your poems out loud and see if they are easy to follow when spoken. If not, rework the wording. OK, so that was a long suggestion… I hope it helps you though!
These are lovely poems! I look forward to reading more of your work. DoN
Very pretty.
Er, I think you meant “fiends” in the Tilion poem (it says “fends). Very smoothly written, and the images are vivid, though I think you should have mentioned the bit about Tilion being in love with Arien. Also, maybe you should mention in the summary that it’s a Silmarillion fic, so people could find them in the search engine. (I can’t be the only one obsessive enough to look, can I?)