"I know you." by lhunen
Darkness.
It overwhelmed my everything. My frightened candle flame guttered out under the suppressing quiet of utter night. I floated for a moment in black obliviousness. And then a small thought fluttered toward me, and alighted gently, like a knife blade scrapes a throat, like a horrific butterfly. He is here.
Fear.
It overwhelmed my everything. My frightened mind guttered out under the suppressing quiet of icy terror. I floated for a moment in black ice. And then a vast thought soared toward me, and alighted fiercely, like an eagle hits its prey, like a demonic lion. He has breathed on me.
And I turned, slower than honey, faster than wind. And I saw him. And he was vast and black and fear and darkness and hate. And I heard him.
His voice was like black knives on black rock. It towered on its own, alone and miserable.
And he said, “I know you.”
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Please review. This is my very first attempt at a fanfic, and I need some honest opinions, on what to keep and what to change. Thank you very much for reading it and I hope it wasn’t too unbearable for you.
8 Comments
wow, that was SOOOOO cool! very creepy, but awesome. will there be more? i really hope so! i can’t wait to find out what will happen – if it will! please keep going!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Ihunen, this is excellent! Sorry it took me so long to find it, I wasn’t sure on the title…But it’s wonderful! I also deleated some of my PMs, so now I can recieve them again. I can just see this confrontation, very clearly! Congrats on writing something so good! 🙂
THis is very cool. I love the descriptions that you used.
I’d like to see where this goes. Very nice so far!
thank you, to everybody who reviewed so kindly. i hadn’t really thought much about extending it–it only came into my head one day as i was bored–at first i didn’t even recognize the people as frodo and sauron. but i will look into it. thank you once again!
Short, but sweet. Very poetic. Me like, me like.
wow. you guys are all so nice! i added one chapter, but that’s all. i don’t want to mess with the integrity of tolkien’s beautiful story.
I loved the your fan fiction!!! It made me laugh and i thought it was a good descrip. of sauron! 🙂