In a Quiet Forest by EnedisilfromStandelf
I walked along the edge of a stream. Even though it was midnight, I wasn’t worried. I was the only one for miles around. No one ever came into this glade, they all thought it was haunted by the spirit of a girl who had been murdered 1,000 years ago. Of course, that ghost was me, though I’m not a ghost at all.
As I neared a small waterfall, I heard the sound of crunching leaves and twigs, and I knew it couldn’t be me, for I took great care to walk silently. It sounded like heavy boots, two pairs of them, two people. Presently, I heard two male voices. I hid behind a thick oak tree as two men stepped into view.
(tell me what u think, and i’ll add more!)
16 Comments
It’s very interesting so far, but I would consider writing heftier chapters, not just a couple paragraphs. Take your time, your writing is good. Just give us a little more to read! ~Newra
haha! this is the story i beta’d *nodds wisely*. c’mon elanor, ya need to give ’em the rest, it’s really good.
Sounds super interesting. Now I REALLY want to know what happens.
I don’t know why no one posted a review, but HURRY HURRY HURRY!!! Come out with the rest!!!! I hate cliffhangers!!! PLEASE!!!!
Will you PLEASEE continue? I really really want to find out what happens!
i liked it ,keep going , so when is more coming or are ya going to keep us in sepsence!!!!!!!!
MORE MORE MORE!!!!!! The story is great!!! PLZ GET MORE PUT UP!!!!!
Please, write more! I really want to know what happens.
good. like i told you b4, i like it. please continue, i wish to see her relationship/history with this Denolas/dark Leaf character.
~emily
write more please
I like the longer chapter, and the story is progressing very nicely, but what happens next?
i love it keep going
*gasp* come on ene, you have to continue!!! you can’t leave us hanging! this is really good, i love it.
Interesting. I’ll read more, if you write more!
*gasp* coolies! wuts gonna happen next?
Okay… here’s the deal. I liked it, but some of the things sounded a little unlogical if you understand. First of all, a wounded elf maiden binding two grown and probably extremely stong men to their chairs without any rope to speak of. I just am a little confused. I’m not meaning to sound rude or mean, I just think that you can make it out alot better if you just put a little more time into thinking of something that will really make sense and people will like. I really do like it, just think about the way you present this story. It has ALOT of potential. Keep up the good work.