Lay of Galadriel by Ardaneth_Elesse
Immortal hope, immortal lands
Unmarred and purest light
Bright is the jewel on her fair hand
O she, the Lady-White
Of Eldamar I sing to thee
Unchanged by mortal time
So far across the Western sea
And told in mortal rhyme
Forgotten are her words of wise
O she who loves the stars
So dark are now the eastern skies
To bear the ages’ scars
But hope still stays the hearts of they
Who do not die or fade
And ever in this land they stay
Until this land unmade
Now calling from the Elvenhome
Brings her fears to see
She fears the wild waves and foam
She fears to cross the sea
For long ago an oath was sworn
That tainted many hands
A bloody feud to war was born
Astray from Elven lands
And she of passion’s loyalty
Did swear the oath of sorrow
She of Noldor royalty
Was banned from bright tomorrow
Now queen of wooded singing gold
And meadow’s silver sheen
Where wisdom’s secret speech is told
Unfading, ever-green
From crystal starry fountain flows
And kindles eyes alight
Arranged in gleaming starry rows
And banishes the night
From beads of silver sparkling dew
On crystal midnight flower
In shades and hues of shining blue
Behold, the midnight hour
To chance upon the Lady’s grove
To see the mirrored spring
From far and wide the heroes strove
Of them, these visions bring
But years in mortal lands run fast
As leaves in autumn days
She counted sadly years that passed
Until they parted ways
And then the twilight time would end
And mortal’s time to tread
A time for elven hearts to mend
A time to move ahead
A final route on ships of grey
Carved like feathered swan
And thinking of that fateful day
Of war on Alqualonde
Of ships she sees now in her dream
A journey and a plight
She sees the starry crystal gleam
Of peak of Everwhite
Beyond the sheet of darkened cloud
No more for her to roam
The light goes through the darkened shroud
Alas, the Elvenhome.
12 Comments
Wow!!! What an AWESOME poem!!! Definitely the best I’ve read in a long while. What stunning imagery and description! Amazing stuff!!!
Like all of your writing…I am very impressed..the meter wasn’t really clear untill I got to the third stanza but the unifomity is remarkable. One of the hardest things to do in poetry is to portray a story, and you did much better than a lot of poets I’ve read…Keep on writing…i look forward to it.
Wow! That was beautiful! Very well written! Flows really well from one part to the next!
Oh wow. That is beautiful. That’s almost like something Tolkien would write himself. That is really beautiful.
Wow…that was so amazing i cant even rhyme and make sense at the same time let alone write somthing that beautiful..you are truly a gifted writer..as always i look forward to reading more of your work.:)
Wow, I wish I could write poetry like that!
A poem worthy to be told in Imladris.
It’s absolutely beautiful!!! I love it. Would you mind if I printed it off to hang in my room? Put it in a nice font and frame it. That would be perfect. You really know how to write!!!
Sara
Wish I came up with stuff that good in English Class
Sorry to take so long to review, but I like this a lot. The rhyme is smooth and unforced and the tone is mournfully peaceful. Very eloquent and lovely. Great job!
wow. thats really pretty! i cant write (fics, poems, lays, whatever) worth my life! its beautiful! 🙂
~me
I see A high degree of competency here. As good as many published works. I call you “poet”.