My Brother, My Captain, My Kin by gwedhieth
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“Mommy! Mommy! Look what Daddy gave me! Mommy?” Boromir ran yelling excitedly into the castle at Minas Tirith waving around the Horn of Gondor. Upon finding his mother, he sees her tenderly stroke her rounding stomach. Confused by her tender moment, he asks what she is doing. Finduilas, mother of an almost five year old Boromir, was caught off guard by her son’s enthusiastic entrance.
“That’s great, Bormi. The Horn of Gondor is a very special gift. Not to be used in light circumstances. Only use the horn in a time of dire need and distress”, she said forcefully. She was actually quite surprised at the affection her usually reserved husband had displayed in giving the gift.
“Okay mommy. But why were you rubbing your tummy? Are you hungry? Do you have a tummy ache? Do you need Daddy?” Boromir asked worriedly, going off on a rampage. Finduilas sighed. She had tried to delay this confrontation for as long as possible. It seemed as if the possible time had just arrived.
“Boromir, come over here and sit on mommy’s lap”, Finduilas said as she sat on the steps residing below the desolate throne of the absent king.
“You are such a big boy now all grown up. Inside mommy’s tummy right now there is a little baby growing into a little brother or sister, just for you. You won’t be the little baby anymore, you will be mommy’s big helper.” she continued as Boromir came over and sat on her lap.
“Wow mommy! I want a baby brother. I will teach him everything I know! Can I see him right now?” Boromir asked energeticly
“No Boromir, but you can listen to the baby and even feel it in my belly” at this Boromir bent his head down to listen to his sibling (that he insisted was a boy). As his head was pressed to Finduilas’s stomach, he felt a sudden pressure and his head started pounding in defiance. His not yet born sibling had just kicked him in the head.
“Mommy, he just kicked me!” Boromir cried. Finduilas hugged her son and her laughter echoed throughout the many halls.
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His younger brother, Faramir, came running out into the halls, not knowing where he was heading. Boromir felt his five year old brother run into him with tears glistening in his eyes, and he knew what had happened. Not saying a word he dragged his brother into his arms and allowed him to sob into his shoulder. Boromir felt his brother fall into his embrace before he too cried the tears that needed to come.
“Boromir!” he heard his father call. His father had returned home at the worst possible moment. Instead of returning his father’s call he defied him and continued to cry with his brother. His father would find out what had happened soon enough.
Suddenly Boromir sat up in his bed, noticing that his eyes were damp and his forehead glistening with sweat. Of all the dreams to have on this day, it had to be that one. It was the one that replayed his mother’s death and the change in his father. Of all days to have the dream, it had to be today!
a/n-This story is a joint production composed by myself, gwedhieth, and lilpippin. Please review!!!! This is my first fanfiction, let me know how i am doing. thanks. Also, please send any private messages to both of us.
disclaimer-These characters are ours. No really! Yes, Tolkien ultimately came up with the whole world of middle earth and all of the characters. But they are ours! (None of the characters in this fanfiction our our own creation all Tolkien’s)
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thank you to anyone who reviews!! sorry that this chapter is really boring. i forgot to put in the summary that faraimir is hurt in the search for a family treaure. i would submit the action chapter soon but my co-author has the only copy and she is out of town for the week. i will post it as soon as she is back. thanks.
Please continue! You left me on such a cliff hanger!
hey everyone. lilpippin here. obviously my wonderful friend Lauren forgot to mention her wonderful typing skills. *makes amused face at gwedhieth* hehehe. unfortunately i must say that though i am back from the trip, the second chapter is not finished yet. if you all review and let us know what you think i promise that the second chapter can be longer. or not… (that is such a threat) we need encouragment here.
i am sorry to any one wanting a quick posting of the second chapter. you are at the mercy of lilpippin since that is her chapter. she has the plan also. thanks for submitting
This is my first fanfic that I have EVER read!(as you both know) lilpippin is holding me hostage until a review by me is submitted. (hehehe) Actually it is quite good, and I am surprised that you guys (of all ppl) came up w/ it! Quite surprising!Luv ya both. (to lilpippin: Can I go now?)
cool idea!! i can see how the two are connected but i would add more about the personalities and emphasise Denethors change of heart but im jus nitpicking so watever. very awesomely well written!
You might have to work on the links between each point of the story, or it becomes rather disjointed and choppy. Also, try not to hurry the plot, I’m sure the first part of the story is deinitely worth more words than that! Elaborate a little more on character thoughts, rather than just concentrating on the actions as that’s what intrigues the reader. Character portrayal. Basically this story as a whole just happened too quickly to me. The horn of gondor struck me as an item that would have been passed to Boromir with his coming of age, or something close to that. I doubt Denethor would actually trust a child with it, especially since he hasn’t lead any armies yet.
ok am still liking the story (*subliminal-message*and everyone should also read Family Ties great story too!*subliminal-message*) I’m defintaly going to foward this to my friend who is a HUGE Boromir fan (I personally perfer Faramir ^_^)
i really like this story. the title is really clever
will you please update soon
Liking it, i definately agree with the comment that it should have less action and more thoughts feelings and etc should be included, but it definately looks like it will turn out a good one
Mr V (p.s.check out my first attempt, r/r much appreciated)
This is interesting. I love reading about the two brothers, and I’m eager to see where this is heading. I agree with a few of the points already mentioned in previous reviews, about smoothing it out a bit and adding more emotion, but overall I think its pretty good.
~Rev
I love your story! hope you’re going to continue it. The dialogue between brothers is excellent, setting is excellent… keep going. I am wondering what’s going to happen to Faramir. And who was the guy? did he get killed or will he be back? many possibilities here…..
very good! i can’t wait for more! and tell your “helpers” that i said thank you for doing that!