Never Been Told by aravis
I own NOTHING of Tolkiens. But I do however own my own characters.
Luinear looked around at the aftermath of the raid. She was standing in a circle of enemies. Her blade Celebnar was pressed to her forehead. The grins of the enemy sent shivers down her spine. She felt like screaming. Her hand was shaking uncontrollably.
“Give it up girl!” a drawling voice behind her whispered mockingly.
She turned around in a full circle only to face the soldiers again. The enemies of the White Tree, of Gondor. Hate was coursing through her blood like wildfire.
“Drop your sword and surrender to us… NOW!” he said again. Anger was in his voice and a menacing edge as well.
She knew no way of escape. With a deep sigh of defeat she sheathed her blade and turned to face the owner of the voice that made her submit. His stony face broke into a smile of evil delight. Then suddenly and without warning something hit her on the head. Stars burst before her eyes and eveything turned black.
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A figure ran through the forest. A girl with long black hair robed in white, her feet barely touching the ground. Her breath was heavy but she did not slow down. Dark things were after her. Evil things. Beings of shadow and darkness. The Gaur(werewolves) were on the move. Running after her. Ready to strike. She ran blindly with the moonlight as her only guide. She reached the edge of cliff and stopped abruptly. Turning around she looked up and in a whisper she pleaded:
“Help me!”
Everything turned into a swirl of colors and plunged into darkness.
PLEASE I BEG OF YOU TO TELL ME IF YOU LIKED IT OR NOT. TRUST ME IF YOU DON’T YOU’LL NEVER KNOW WHAT WILL HAPPEN. HOPING TO PUBLISH SOON, BYE UNTIL THE NEXT TIME!!!
33 Comments
It seems rather short. 🙂
sounds very interesting
AWSOME!! I love it! Pretty pleas write more?!??
I TOTALLY LOVE IT!!!
Please continue writing
Write more write more write more!!! It was really short but I like what I read. V. suspenceful. Do keep writing please.
Keep it up! its great so far! i hope u finish it so i can read the rest of it!!!
I loked very much, please continue it and don’t intgie me.
it sounds intresting! 🙂
Please go on!!
it is sort of strange but i like it! it is sort of un-pieced-ish. sorry
YAY!!!! Something really really good!! Write more…
whatever you do , don’t stop! this is great! absolutely loved it!
AHH! very good! tell me More! i need MOORREEEE!!! lol, very very good, now please tell me what happens…please….
It’s very interesting, but you’re being really evil with your cliffhangers. Oh btw, since it’s a fanfic it doesn’t really matter, but when Thorongil was Captain of gondor, Theoden was like three or something, so I don’t think Eomer would be around. But like I said, it’s a fanfic. Do write more, and pleeeeeeeease cut it out with the cliffhangers! 😉
It’s very interesting, but you’re being really evil with your cliffhangers. Oh btw, since it’s a fanfic it doesn’t really matter, but when Thorongil was Captain of gondor, Theoden was like three or something, so I don’t think Eomer would be around. But like I said, it’s a fanfic. Do write more, and pleeeeeeeease cut it out with the cliffhangers! 😉
WHOA! Cool! write more! I like it!
EEEEEK! AAAAUUUGGH! sorry…near heart-attack there…which i entirely blame you for, btw! ;-D great! please, pretty please, keep going!
I like it! Keep going!! PLZ!
I’ve never written a review before-do you just write comments? Anyay, in my opinion the story is wonderfully written, I could never come up with something like that. I do hope it will be continued soon!
Oh, man! This is really good, you have to post with more on this story, it’s good!
This is pretty cool, I like it.
I don’t really know what’s going on, but I still like it a lot =)
Your characters are just made up, right? I don’t think I’ve heard of them, but I may be wrong…
Anyway, keep, writing, this is pretty cool, I love the cliffhanger endings and I really want to know who everyone is and what on earth is going on.
You are excelent at keeping people on their toes, a wonderful thing in a writer!
Me want more! it’s great!
That is a great story! I like it sooo much! Please continue! What happens next?! Good writting.
Great story! Keep going!
oooo nice! keep writing!
Aw man, I want to know what happens next! It’s torture!!!
It’s really good. I WANNA SEE CHAPTER 11! 😉
Yeah! It’s getting really good! Keep it up!!!!
Keep writing! For a first fanfic, this is GREAT! And it is so much better than mine was! P.S. Aravis, as in from ‘The Horse and His Boy?’
Are you a Narnia fan? Anyway there is so much suspense at the end of chapters but hey that’s what keeps us reading! Lots of fun to read keep it up!
you want reviews? Fine! jk, the story is going great! please update soon! i wanna know what happens next!!!!!!
i liked this story! and now i wonderin where chapter 15 is! though i do have to say Eomer wouldnt be around at the time Aragorn posed as Throngil..;)
and i loved the plot twist…i woulda never had imagined that the girl was kidnapped as a guise to get at Aragorn….that was awsome!
One vote for chapter 15! please keep going!
That was really good! I am waiting for more! You have us on edge, and I can’t wait to hear the rest.