Once Before Darkness by Nendae
A/N: This is basically the prologue. I use first person to make the story more personal and it is from the perspective of Nendae. If any of you children are so inspired to create art work about any of the characters in my story, I would LOVE it. PM me if you do.
Rating: PG-13 for suggestive dialogue and thematic elements.
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All I felt was coldness. Coldness spreading to my fingertips. I was numb. So numb, I couldn’t even feel my legs give way beneath me. I dropped to the ground and stared, tears stinging.
“What?”
“He’s dead,” Denethor shot, hot tears springing from his own eyes, “Must I repeat myself, wench? My son is dead.”
My breathing quickened. My heart was beating so hard, I could only breath in short, painful gasps. I felt my feet pounding upon the hard stones of the streets of Gondor, but I saw nothing. All I saw was Boromir… reaching for my hand… seizing my lips, hungrily… telling me he loved me more than anyone… the feel of his strong, hot flesh under mine…
I was far outside of Gondor when I regained my sight. My heart was burning inside my chest and tears burned in my eyes. My knees buckled under a great pain. My belly writhed and I could do nothing but scream. I screamed. Tears poured down my face as blood poured from between my legs. I could do nothing but scream. I screamed, but I knew that screaming would not bring Boromir back. It would only bring more pain from my belly, the blood wetting her dress and ruining it. I looked at my hands. They were shaking, pale and cold. I was dying. No, I was not dying.
My only memory of Boromir was dying.
Which meant I may as well die.
Sometimes I wish I had.
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A/N: I know it was short, but the other chapters will be longer. Please review. It’s greatly appreciated, trust me!
79 Comments
Sweet beginning!!!! What’s gonna happen??????? Update soon, pleeeeaaaaase!!!!!
Not bad for the start, keep going with it. I’ll read it..
Oh oh oh…. what a intriguing read…. awesome chappie…. update soon pleeeeaaaase!!!
Oh wow…. now she knows it’s love… I am HOOKED! Update really really soon, pleeeeeaaaaase!!!
WOW! What a great way to hook a reader’s interest! I will definately be looking for more!!
Wonderful! I enjoy your switching between past memories and the present, keeps me anticipating what comes next!
Before I begin it would only be fair to say that I am not a Boromir fan-however this fic is changing my opinoin somewhat! You are doing an excellent job of constructing a very real man whom we know very little about from the movies. Your use of flashbacks to gain sympathy for the main character is excellent! Keep up the good work, I will keep my eye out for further chapters.
Kindly, LizzyB
Very powerful. You convey such despair without using convuluted descriptions and images. It is so powerful because it is so simply and bluntly put. I cannot wait to see how the rest of this unfolds. *plans to read your other chapters right now*
“Sadness began scraping at my eyelids, hoping for escape.”
VERY nice. You’ve got a quitea few of these quick descriptions and such that really jump out at you… if you could try and put more like that in other places where things get a little kid-ish, this story would be incredible. It’s good how it is, though! You’re dialogue is very real… though some of it a bit out of Tolkien’s style. Then again, you don’t have to write in Tolkien’s style, so it’s cool! Nice job… post some more!
OO!!! It just got even more interesting! Keep it up, you’re doing fab!
Oh, wow….. wow, wow, wow….. wow, wow, w– I’d better stop saying that. This is amazing. Keep going!!!
Ooooh!!!! I love it! 😀 I don’t think I’ve ever read a fanfiction as heart-rendering as this. Do continue! I’ll be annoying you so much till the next comes 😉
Love from,
Lily (eee 😀 )
it seemed like a lot of people reviewed this, so i’m gonna too. I like it!! i hope the next chapters are soon! really wonderful stuff, i loved it.
AWWW!!!! ^_^ He kissed her 😀 Nope, never… This is the only one… You sure? I’ll end up really really annoying you someday… Write you up at 4 a.m. “You posting? Have you posted yet? Any ideas of the next chapter?” Hehe 🙂 Anyhoo, keep posting! Pleases!! *re-reads chapter 5 over and over again*
please do!!!
I am enjoying this very much Nendae!!! If you were ever to do a fic on Faramir I would be very appreciative 🙂 Poor Immelion. My heart goes out to him lol
That is sooooo sweet!!!!!! 😀 He got rid of *mocks* “Cee-Cee” ^_^ Wow, thats awesome! Btw, do you pronounce ‘Mir’ as Mur or Meer? -_-‘ I keep saying Mur 😛
That was great!! You have really made me like boromir alot more!!!
when i was reading this i was like OMG! this story is beautiful! i’m gonna cry….lol. but it is! it’s like…like…so unexplainable! are you going to write a book? because wow! wow! wow! this story is awesome! its almost like its apart of the tolkien books.
whoa…this is like whoa….she has alot of drama. sorry for reviewing 2 times.
write more! It’s too suspenseful!
*evil grin* little such-and-such got what she deserved. Keep up the good work Nendae!!
LizzyB
I agree with Erynlinia, I like the way it switches from past to present, too. Very cleverly written, all I can say is AWESOME, AWESOME, AWESOME, AWESOME.
*sobs* Wow….. oh wow….. wow wow wow…… why must thou rip their tender hearts in twain? Yon triangle shalt be one’s death, methinks….. so DON’T YOU DARE KILL ANYONE!!!
I just read the latest chapter! It was awesome! I can’t wait for the next one!
Oooh the plot thickens *grins happily* Go Boromir!! Keep up the good work Nendae!
Wow wow wow…. what an awesome chappie!!! I almost cried, you’re such a good writer!!! Write more please!!!
Hurry up and write the next chapter!!!! Suspense is NOT my thing.
Later
Farwen
Chapter eight was nice! Pleeease write the next one, I can’t wait to see what happens! G2G!
KOTD
Arrrrrgghhhhhhhh…… torture…….. pain and tears and screaming……. but… what a vivid picture you painted in my head! Amazing stuff. I love it when people describe such powerful emotion. Update, please please pleaseplease!!!!
OMG! That was saaaad! *cries* ON TO CHAPTER 10! *can’t wait!*
KOTD
I’m still reading … It’s still good … I’ll be waiting for that next chapter.
wahhh!!! sooo saaddd!!! they have to get back together!! luv the story!!!!
omg….omg….omg….it was IMMELION!!!!!!!! I CANNOT BELIEVE IT!!!! IT WAS IMMELION!! ahh!!! scary man guy dude! AHH! ok. i’ve calmed down now. but…..WHAT THE HECK IS IMMELION DOING IN ROHAN! TRYING TO RUIN NENDAE LIFE OVER AGAIN?!?!?!?! sorry…but when i read a story that seems real. i kinda think that i am trying to protect the character i like…sorry. anyways….great job at the chapter. i could really feel all the emotions. keep up the great work. Namarie until my next review.
Liana
😮 !!!!!!! Gack!!! I want moooooore!!! Please??
I loved how you brought Immelion in-though I have no idea why lol
Poor Boromir! He needs some loving . . . :evilgrin:
Ummmm… you’re gonna write more, right. cause there is no way you can leave off where you did…. its not fair….
ooooh! Luved chapter ten! Write the next chapter soon, otherwise I’ll die with suspense! jk!
AWESOME!
o0o0o0o0o0o0o0o0o….whats gonna happen now??!?!?!?!??!??!?
Write more, I hate suspense. ;D
~Farwen
OOOooooooohhhhhh……. they’re in trouble now….. DON’T hurt anyone, pleeeeaaaaaase!!!!!!!!!
*pouts* Poor Boromir is going to go nuts soon!! More!!!
Darn, you are absoloutely evil! *chants* NO MORE CLIFF HANGERS, NO MORE CLIFF HANGERS! *grins sheepishly* I LOVE this story. It’s awesome! It’s splediferous. Keep writing, and hurry!!
More please!
Oh my goodness. I absolutely loved this story!!! I sat down to start reading it and I could’t stop! I can’t wait to see what happens
*wails* WHY?????? Why are you doing this????? You’d better have a very good reason….. this had better have a happy ending!!!
wow. That was really sad. What I can’t believe is that you are the same person who wrote Lord of the Things! They are two COMPLETELY different writing styles! I had no idea until I looked at the name who wrote them! You are an amazing wtiter! Can’t wait for the next chapter!
i’ll sob with you…this is sad…its like a soap opera. lol. keep on writing! this chapter was great! i’m looking forward to more chapters.
Liana
OH MY GOD!!!!!!!
You are such an amazing writer! I read so much fanfictioin all the time and always wish they could be dramatic like this but they never are! You have a gift!
That was sooooooo great !!! I love This story sooooooo much! It has really given me a new appreciation for Boromir!!! Kepp up the great writing!
please continue!! Great story!!
LOTRFREAK
I thought that Nendae’s family was not really acting like a noble family, as seems to be implied by the title “Lady”. I don’t know, just didn’t seem like her parents fit the picture.
Well, here’s the scoop. In a future chapter you’ll see a piece of what Nendae’s family life used to be… See, her father was the captain of the Gondorian army before he became and alcoholic… Yes. And now all I need is to get those new chapters up. ACK. TYPE FASTER, ME.
Yay! Awesome chapter! It’s great that Nendae’s mother really cares about her. Wonderful stuff!
wow!!!! that was a great chapter, please update soon…
Liana
Very good!
*Le gasp* What a character development!! Kudos for you dear Nendae 🙂 Brilliant as always
LUVs Me
AHHHHHHHHH!!!!! i LOVE IT !!!You are doing so great with this story!!!! Keep up the great work!!!
Oh my gosh! Have I told you before, I LOVE this story!!! Please update soon!!! This chapter was amazing!!!!!
teeheeheeHEEE I loof this story 😀 it made me actually like Boromir, which is amazing for me lol. grrrreat job. very romantic. On the technical side, I’ve taken some writing courses and one thing is about your tags. Like “Blah blah blah” she sneered. “Oh No gah gah gah” he smirked. lol I know that the words don’t make sense but you get the picture xD. Sometimes tags are overused and it’s better to keep it simple. But good work anyway 😀 heheheh you make not obsess so much over the perfectness [or attempted perfectness] of my work because now I realize it doesn’t have to be perfect for people to like it. yay! wow, that was like a backwards compliment, sort of o.O … eh… I’m random.
Writer’s block, I’m currently suffering from that myself, disgusting isn’t it? well I’m glad yours is gone now so hurry up and post the next chapter!lol 😉
Good story, good emotion…PLEASE FINISH!!!…sorry got a bit carried away there…but seriously this is a very good plot that dives deep into human emotion, it’s almost refreshing to get some raw feeling in a story in contrast to the humor i’ve been reading to sustain myself….keep up the good work
Yay! Another awesome chapter!!! Please write MORE!!!!! 😀
nice job, it was goooood. ^_^ although I did find it amusing when you put, “she put the finger back on” LOL.
Curled up by the edge of the water, I felt the wind begin to playfully toy with my hair in an almost affectionate way. Suddenly, I realized that it was not the wind that was playing with my hair. I felt warm fingers just barely brush my scalp.
how could she not feel him playing with her hair…? maybe she was just to focused on something so she didn’t notice..
It barely even came out of his mouth. I could hardly even hear it and if it hadn’t been dead silent as it had been there I would have missed it. But I was so glad that I hadn’t missed it. He said it was such sweetness and sincerity that there was in the world. He blushed when he realized that it had come out of his mouth, released my face and turned away, pretending to be fascinated with the water that gently swayed and sparkled.
awwww…that’s so sweet…i want a guy like that when i get older..
“I want… I want more than anything to see Boromir… to let him see me once before darkness… once before all hope was gone… I want to see him one more time before darkness… that’s all I ask. And it’s all I can’t have.
that sounds like it could be made into a sad song..
when I sat and wept over his unconscious body?
huh? i thought he was in that boat thing-a-ma-bob?
“Meet your new suitor, Nendae,†Denethor said and stepped back. Boromir stepped forward and his blue eyes twinkled in an innocent fashion.
“Hello, Nendae. I don’t think we’ve met.†He kissed my hand.
It was the happiest day of my life.
awww! cute! but it’s terrible that she can’t have her happy ending with Borormir..anyway, awesome chapter. i’m going to read the next chapter right now. =D
Liana
“Fight for Boromir,†I whispered into the cold wind that chilled me to my very core. I trembled ever so slightly and took a deep breath. Slowly, I nodded my consent. I would fight for everything that Boromir and I had built. If Boromir had failed to destroy this ring, then I would fight in his place. I trembled with some unidentified emotion. I quickly realized what it was. It was courage, pulsing violently through my veins. I looked up to Eowyn. “I will go and fight for Boromir… who is everything that I love…â€
yay! she’s becoming stronger! go Nendae! i hope she survives this, i mean i hope she becomes like a heroine or something, well, maybe not as big as Eowyn but almost as big as Eowyn is good too..anyway, good chapter, but it was pretty mushy with Nendae and Boromir stuff…but then again, i’ll probably be complaining if it wasn’t. lol, so now i’m going to read the next chapter, keep on writing!
Liana
Dark curls would certainly be suspicious among Rohan.
yea it would, but i want dark curls just the same.
And then I hated myself even more as I braved the coming battle, my eyes shining with the intensity of bravery and of one who had once been loved.
that sounds like it should belong in a book…or something…
It was amazing how a few days could make such a huge change in someone’s perspective of another.
yea it is, and i believe Nimire is the who’s the selfish whore, she makes me feel so mad, that i could punch a mirror or something. i hate girls like her. and it’s so weird how her mother changed…just like that. i thought she was supposed to be mean…? or maybe it was just bitterness, like you said in a previous chapter, i think…anyway, i really liked this chapter, please keep on writing, and please update as soon as you can!
Liana
wow. it’s been a while since i’ve read this story and i just read the last…i think five chapters. they were amazing. I can’t wait to see what happens next! You are a truly amazing writer! You go girl!
*whines* Neeeeeeeendaaaaae!!!…*sob*…why haven’t you…*sob*…Posted. Any. More. Chapters…? *stomps foot*
Well, this may come a little late.
But I wanted to say that your story shows incredible depth in emotions, and your skill as an author is remarkable.
I also noted you wrote a complete opposite, if I’m not mistaken
‘The Lord of the Things’? Well that was good parody, best I’ve read actually.
I’ve read enough to realise you are incredibly gifted as an author.
Elandor.
You have a great talent at writing. You really bring out Boromir’s character and made me LIKE him!! Please continue with your writing! I’m hungry for more!
Yay another chapter!!!!! What is wrong with Boromir though? what a jerk . . . Nendae should have slapped him, and Faramir too lol. 😉
I’ve read all the other chapters, I just review every few that I read…
This is so beautiful, and so terribly sad. You’ve got me crying! Oh, wow, you are an excellent writer! ~God bless
Wow awesome story, you’re a great writer, I love how you have set it out with the flashbacks – it shows a balance of her character and manages to make me like her….
How could you say that about Denethor though? He was very harsh, but that was mainly because he was brokenhearted about his wife dying. He would never have chased after another woman.
And why did you make her chase after that guy whateverhisnameisiforgot?
Other than that it’s awesome, and don’t get me wrong, the very fact that I’m furious when you do something I don’t like shows how you’ve affected me with your wonderful writing… please post more!!!! And more!!!! And more…..
Oh, your story is really great!!! It’s the first (and possibly the only) story that “took my breath away”! I love the flow of they story, especially at the aftermath of Boromir’s death. Please finish it!!!
That was a great story!! I can’t wait untill you continue!
WHOA!!!!!!!!!!!! Please please please write more!! AAAHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!! Sorry. Nervous breakdown. You are an amazingly talented writer, I used to check the website every day hoping for a new chapter! I’ve been waiting so LONG!!! Gag me with a spoon. If I don’t see a new chapter soon, I will sneak into your room at night, drizzle maple syrup all over your feet, wait ’till you wake up, and attempt to bribe you with chocolate bars and Jolly Ranchers. jk. Keep up the good work!!!!!!!!! Many apologies for my insanity, I really can’t help it, you know.
My word. I think I might have to go back and read it over again in order to remember anything; it’s been so long. SO LONG!!!!!!!!!!!! 🙂 *hyperventilating* I may or may not be okay. Wait… I’m okay. 🙂
I am in love with this story!
It is really well written, and I like the fact that you have integrated it all together with this new character an the original story.
Please write more!
What?!? That’s it?!? Nooooo!!!! Please finish it!!! 🙁 🙁 🙁