The Thoughts of Legolas by foshpickle~greenleaf
For many long years have I lived in this land,
under the trees and sun and stars.
For all my long ages it has protected me
from the shadow just afar.
But the shadow now grows and I have been called
to protect the land of my birth.
And I relize now, after all I’ve been through,
that a different evil surrounds Middle-Earth.
That evil is time, and what time can do,
and it saddens me to know,
that even after all I’ll do,
time will still not go.
I linger here, stuck in the past,
while others pass away.
Yet at the same time I’m so far ahead,
I’ve seen so much more than they.
The change they bring is worse than death,
I must suffer through it all.
The forests grow fewer, the cities grow larger,
their towers so very tall.
I’ve lost so many and loved so few,
and this is what draws near-
misery and grief will take me,
my tears will become paths to fear.
Will my land now protect me,
or will I have to sail away?
Away from the places I love,
never to come back another day?
I look to the stars for answers,
yet none has come to me.
I’ll still be waiting here, in my heart,
for when from this choice I’ll be free.
23 Comments
Opinions? Anyone? Hello…
wow this is a really good poem….it seems to fit since elves are everlasting……..i like it!!!! great job!!!!!!!!!!! hey, can you read my 2 poems for me???? “ode to frodo” and “the lone figure” ???
keep on writting!!!!!!!!
AAW! this is so sweet, and the rhymes are great! you are a great poet, i look forward to your next work!
Thanks!!! I’ll review yours, sure! I’ve got a new one, Just a Little hope. Could you review it for me then???? : )
Hi there…this is a lovely poem. I do have a suggestion that might make it even more effective though– its seems as if the poem doesn’t need or want to rhyme. When one thinks, the thoughts just flow out, so I was thinking that the message of the poem would come through even clearer if it didn’t rhyme, and just flowed naturally on as if in thought.
*Haha! Erika don’t know bout this one, does she?* It’s really really really really really really really really really reallly really good.
Thanks for the suggestion! I rhyme when I think, but I’m just kind of odd. Dwarvish Hobbitlike Elf… How did you get that name?
Well, from the title I thought it would be totally different. But, well, it seems it would be appropreiate in the time frame of TTT, when Legolas wants to leave Helm’s Deep. I think its well done, but alittle dramactic. Keep writing though, you’ve got potential!
~Levanna
I am a dramatic person, and at the time in a dramatic mood. Since I don’t write a lot of poetry, I didn’t think I’d even get a half-positive review… you are all so nice… (tears) See, there’s that drama again.
That’s kewl that you think in rhymes ^_~ How’d I get my name? Umm…an identity crisis? LOL How did you get your name?
My friend’s little sister asked for a fudgesicle (or something like that) but she called it a foshpickle, so my friend decided to calll me that instead of my other nickname.. I shudder to think of that one. Greenleaf cause I like legolas so much. : )
This is a really cool poem. It’s melancholy and wistful, but it also speaks of hope, in a way; Legolas and the Elves must leave, but the race of Men is progressing. As more cities and taller towers are built, Middle Earth becomes less hospitable to Elves and more full and rich to men. I have one question, though: wouldn’t Legolas partly WANT to sail to be with his family, etc.? It just kinda sound s like he would only go if he had to. Anway, I really like the poem, and it sounds great aloud.
Thanks a bunch for both your reviews! Hmm, I never thought about him wanting to go, good point. Now I have something to think about (Oh boy, there’s a scary thought. Me thinking.) Hehe!
ooh i like ur poem! i wrote one about legolas too – maybe i’ll submit it one day! keep writing, uve got a talent for rhymes!
wow… that is soooo coolies!!
i mean, that would probably be what he would think!!
well done!!
Another victory, Jessie!!!!!! Go you!!!!!
Yes, go me!!! lol, kidding.
I couldn’t stand it! When he leaves the magic that is Middle Earth is truly gone. If you’d have said the word ‘gulls’ I would have been in tears for sure, not just too misty-eyed to read. Thank you!
It is real good. I like it! Of course I LOVE Legolas.
Keep up the good work.
That is REALLY good poetry! Amazing! Really sad though. Nice work!!
ooohhhh… it´s soooo beauteful….
WoWWoWWoW!!! That was sooooo beautiful! I, for one, was moved to actual tears, it was soo cool!
I think this poem is sad and deppressing but also at the same time its pretty good.