Warriers Needed!!! (chapter1) by Egoll_of_Kirshii
Egoll, an elven lady over Kirshii had been bored that night so she decided to go tree walking. She snuck out of her home in Somaah, Kirshii’s capitol, which was up in the trees. She hoped that Adan her husband would not wake up. She climbed out of the window and stood on the branch. She then realized that she had no weapon with her and went back into her room and got her small knife. Even though there were watchmen out, she still wanted a weapon.
Egoll ran from tree to tree enjoying herself she hadn’t been able to do this for a while. She then decided to go and sit up in a branch and listen to the news around the world. Egoll’s hawk MershallĂ« had been a loyal friend to her for many ages. She called to the hawk and it came with plenty of news. Egoll had been able to understand the language of all animals, it was said that it was her gift from the Valar.
The news that the hawk brought wasn’t so thrilling. One of the many Edain’s villages around Kirshii was going to be attacked in a few days by a band of orcs. The village, Authro, didn’t have a very good army. Egoll knew what she had to do; she was going to go help them. She would have to go disguised but Egoll didn’t mind. It would be fun. She ran back to her home to get some old clothing that would make her look of the mortal kind. She got her bow and some arrows and packed her armor as well. Egoll figured if they didn’t have a good army she would most likely need these. She wrote a note to Adan to tell where she was going to be and went out of the house. She called for Gahsh her horse, “Miyah, Gahsh, Miyah.” (Come Gahsh Come). The black faced white mare trotted up to Egoll. Gahsh gave a brief nuzzle and stood still. Egoll worked quickly she attached her armor and a pack of food and jumped on bareback, as
she normally rode. Egoll followed Mershallë to the
town.
3 Comments
Interesting. I will read on, to see how this will develop. I would only suggest if you could describe the surroundings a bit more, and not write just like: ‘…and she sat…and she saw…and went…” It’s fine otherwise, only a little bit of descriptions. Keep going!
Interesting beginning. A couple of things: where is Kirshii? What language was Egoll speaking? And the chapter could have been a bit longer, with more description of a setting…anyway, good start!
Neat story so far!!! The only thing wrong with it that I saw was that it would be helpful if you translated Egoll’s (elvish?) words to English so we knew what she was saying. Otherwise, good work!!!